Oh Dear Me

ATo the younger more naive Kate:
You have so much to learn. On the bright side, you do know what it is that you need to work on. And "the first step is admitting your mistake" as They say. It's also good that you will realize that your writing isn't as coherent to others as you think it is. And you suck at conclusions. Unfortunately, while having learned a lot, most of it is what needs improvement, not the brilliance of your writing as it exists in your head. The trick is to convey the importance of something in your world that no one cares about into the world on paper that people are meant to relate to. So, you need to find better conclusions that make your stories more care-about-able, if you will. Another helpful tip, concentrate on A main idea - like ONE - instead of 6 main ideas - you don't do a good job making multiple intricate points without your writing becoming awkward and confusing. Focus on one main idea and save the others for other papers because - you know - you can write other papers, after all. On a final-ish note, doing all this is far easier to talk about that actually do. Have fun!